Tuesday, November 4, 2008

Descriptive Writing

As stepped out of the Room of Knowledge, i was greeted by the aroma of pizzas.I moved forward and a place slipped into focus.A performance worst nightmare!Empty seats and tables!It felt like I had entered a room that sucked all the happiness out of the person.I willed myself to continue on my way forward.As i left the Kopi Stop,i was greeted by a sight of green.It was so beautiful and open with the sky,a forget-me-not blue and the sun shielded by the clouds,it was a perfect day to have an outdoor activity but my happiness shattered as my way was blocked by a fence like a gate to castle barring me from moving beyond it.I turned to the left where the path was rough and littered with rocks with a steep slope on my right.Until I reached the end of the fence,i turned to my right and there stood my destination.The wall covered with a thin layer of moss after being left in the open,some parts of the wood decaying,with the ropes hanging limply as not even the slightest breeze can be felt.The open air smelt like like grass and the putrid smell of the exhaust fumes from the roaring motor vehicles roaring down the road.So guessed where my Destination is?

Hisyam..

1 comment:

We are Born To ROCK!!!!!!! said...

Hisyam, that's a good attempt.Keep it up. Some good words used and also a metaphor was observed. Those in red means there is room for improvment in phrasing.

Ms Tang